The introduction for this proposal is clear and clearly reveals the purpose of the entire project. The introduction, though short, actively engages the reader. The introduction clearly reveals the focus of the discussion, the benefits of implementing employee evaluations at Lowe’s organization. The main benefit is introduced as a way of capturing the interest of the reader. Such an introduction is important in capturing and maintaining the interest of the reader in the rest of the paper.
The paper has a clear sense of focus from the beginning to the end of the paper. The problem is clearly stated at the introduction and developed throughout the paper. The problem being discussed, and the solution being proposed, can be easily understood from the document. This can be recognized without deep insights into the message of the paper, as it is very clear.
The solution, performing evaluations and implementing the results of the evaluations, is clearly identified and presented. The author goes further to present the benefits of implementing such a solution at the organization.
The proposal does not have adequate in-text citations. The author fails to accredit some information borrowed from outside sources to their authors. Most of the sections, such as the introduction, benefits, Brief History of Lowe’s, Educate Staff and Update Procedures and Policies, do not have citations. Although there are some citations, they are not adequate and not effectively integrated into the proposal.
There are various ways through which the author can improve the paper. The organisation of the paper is one of this ways. The body of the paper particularly, requires a change in the use of headings. The author can use the level 1, level 2 etc. to organize the headings and information. The author should also include adequate use of in-text citations using the correct referencing style such as APA.
The draft is not at least three-quarters of the finished researched proposal; it is only 1489 words. More words should be added to make the minimum of 2000 words. The paper is lacking on APA formatting, both in in-text and reference list. The author should ensure in-text referencing is adequate and effective. The overall organization of the proposal is also necessary.
The writer should look deeper into spelling, grammar and sentence construction in this document. It is also critical that the author looks at the flow of information in the entire paper. The arguments in this document fail to smoothly transition from one to the next. This should be improved.
